Part 11- Sample Answers to 800/4 (Muet Writing)

Since last week, I was rather busy marking the exam papers..the weekends were really taxing as I marked the writing part. After marking about 50 scripts- I was on the verge of ... Luckily the last few scripts managed to save the day. I was really wondering if trend/ stand/ thesis statement really  something alien to them???? Anyway take a look at the questions and sample answers- perhaps you readers could learn a thing or two.

Note that above is the marking scheme for Question 1. Note that in your
answers, you should include the following ( refer to notes in Part 1) :
a)Title
b) Paragraph 1 ( introduction/overview and trend/stand) The trend should link all visuals shown.
c) Paragraph 2 :
 i)analysis should have Key Features (from the visuals), suitable trend words, and data(miss out any one would be considered incomplete)
ii)synthesis should consists of 2 analysis with linkers ( such as while, but, moreover)
d) Paragraph 3 (Conclusion)
The essay should be more than 150 words but should not exceed 200 words.

Please note that in the first paragraph the trend is rather incomplete as it does not link the data in the table and the newspaper headlines effectively. However this student managed to conclude with a trend in the last paragraph.Some of the analysis and synthesis are also incomplete. Anyway this student managed at least to get Band 3- without a trend like many other students, they would not surpass Band 3 for Question 1.

In the second script, the student managed to get her trend right the first paragraph.However the student needs to brush up on her analysis and synthesis (especially) if one hopes to score in this section. 

Good Luck!!!